Comments on: Chapter Fifteen http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/2009/06/15/chapter-eleven/ Fri, 19 Jun 2009 15:01:07 -0400 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.2 hourly 1 By: SR http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/2009/06/15/chapter-eleven/comment-page-1/#comment-48 SR Thu, 18 Jun 2009 14:26:30 +0000 http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/?p=65#comment-48 i like how there's a lot of stuff in this part about Will caring about Sally. i like how there’s a lot of stuff in this part about Will caring about Sally.

]]> By: fredflintstone http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/2009/06/15/chapter-eleven/comment-page-1/#comment-47 fredflintstone Thu, 18 Jun 2009 14:25:44 +0000 http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/?p=65#comment-47 You have a lot of great detail but I think that you could add a little bit more to the scene. Such as why she fainted or how she looked while she was lying on the ground. You have a lot of great detail but I think that you could add a little bit more to the scene. Such as why she fainted or how she looked while she was lying on the ground.

]]> By: fredflintstone http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/2009/06/15/chapter-eleven/comment-page-1/#comment-46 fredflintstone Thu, 18 Jun 2009 14:23:32 +0000 http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/?p=65#comment-46 I love the amount of detail used in this paragraph, especially how you feel like you know everything that some of the characters don't even know. I love the amount of detail used in this paragraph, especially how you feel like you know everything that some of the characters don’t even know.

]]> By: cookies 'n' creeeeam http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/2009/06/15/chapter-eleven/comment-page-1/#comment-45 cookies 'n' creeeeam Thu, 18 Jun 2009 13:13:43 +0000 http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/?p=65#comment-45 I liked the way you potrayed Sally's stubborness. Having her walk out like that really displayed how she gets what she wants. If she wants food, she'll get it I liked the way you potrayed Sally’s stubborness. Having her walk out like that really displayed how she gets what she wants. If she wants food, she’ll get it

]]> By: 19113 http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/2009/06/15/chapter-eleven/comment-page-1/#comment-43 19113 Thu, 18 Jun 2009 13:10:42 +0000 http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/?p=65#comment-43 This is a great start, I think the story is going great... Keep up the good work! This is a great start, I think the story is going great… Keep up the good work!

]]> By: jonpotts http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/2009/06/15/chapter-eleven/comment-page-1/#comment-30 jonpotts Tue, 16 Jun 2009 01:37:30 +0000 http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/?p=65#comment-30 This chapter goes well with the previous ones I think. The characters are really starting to be revealed as individuals, rather than stereotypes. --JP This chapter goes well with the previous ones I think. The characters are really starting to be revealed as individuals, rather than stereotypes.
–JP

]]> By: jonpotts http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/2009/06/15/chapter-eleven/comment-page-1/#comment-29 jonpotts Tue, 16 Jun 2009 01:35:37 +0000 http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/?p=65#comment-29 Maybe it is because she is sick, too weak to show her personality. --JP Maybe it is because she is sick, too weak to show her personality.

–JP

]]> By: jonpotts http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/2009/06/15/chapter-eleven/comment-page-1/#comment-28 jonpotts Wed, 10 Jun 2009 13:37:47 +0000 http://harwoodenglishonline.edublogs.org/?p=65#comment-28 This is Sally right? Then why is she not having a temper tantrum. E.C. This is Sally right? Then why is she not having a temper tantrum.

E.C.

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