Chapter 14

They were all in pretty rough shape and they had to walk a long time to find the right spot but they eventually did. It was a little den underneath a giant tree farther into the forest. Whatever had made it was long gone by now. Will gently laid Sally down in the den so he wouldn’t hurt her or his hand.

“Are you alright, Sally?” Will asked.

“I guess so. Will you get me some water?” she responded in a weak little voice.

Will turned around to look at Ketzel and James. They both shrugged. Where were they going to get water? They were too far from the river that they had gotten their water from before.

“I’ll try Sally but we might not be able to find any, so don’t get your hopes up,” Will said back to Sally. He hated to disappoint people especially family. Family. Where was his family? None of them even knew if their family was alive or dead or if they were still in town but they couldn’t think about that out here. Their first priority was to find water.

“Ketzel, you go that way,” Will said pointing to his left, “try to find anything that might be suitable for drinking.”

“OK,” Ketzel said, “but what about my leg? It’s killing me!”

“Just do the best you can,” Will said. Ketzel admired Will for staying so strong throughout all of this, but James on the other hand was so annoyed by Will’s orders that he sometimes thought of leaving.

“James, you will go that way to find water. Try to be back in an hour so I don’t worry.”

“And what are you going to do exactly?” James asked.

“I need to take care of Sally. Plus my hand is really bad,” Will looked at his hand. It was still pouring out blood, I wouldn’t be able to bring anything back.

“Why can’t I stay here with Sally and you go look for water. You think that just because you’re the oldest that you can boss us around while you do nothing!!” James was standing up and shouting at Will.

“What??!! I am the oldest and I do get to be the boss! So there! End of discussion!”

Ketzel hated when they fought, especially because she never knew who to side with. James was always right, but Will was just so handsome and she liked him more. When Will finally sat back down, James stormed off. Ketzel didn’t want to leave now, but she decided to go. Besides, none of them could survive very long without water.

About 20 minutes into her trip, Ketzel found a little brook not far from their camp.

“YESSS!” she was so happy. She put as much as she could into the buckets that she brought. While she was filling them up she saw a dark figure out of the corner of her eye. She turned around but it was gone. Then when she turned back to the stream she saw it. James.

“You scared me!” she said out of breath.

“Sorry,” he said. All he had was a large water bottle that he was filling up.

“That’s not gonna bring back very much water, James.”

“Maybe, I’m not planning on coming back,” he said kind of shyly.

“WHAT??!!” she looked down at the water and when she looked up he was gone.

Posted by jonpotts on June 15, 2009
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jonpotts on whole page :

I have two favorite parts of this scene. One is the dilemma Ketzal faces in choosing sides–aren’t these moments really where the story happens? The second great moment is the way the author used the stream to create action to show James preparing to go, rather than simply having him shout something and run away. Fabulous.
–JP

June 15, 2009 6:40 pm
19113 on whole page :

Nice job, I think that the story is moving right along.

June 18, 2009 6:12 am
tacos10 on paragraph -1:

I like the image in this paragraph but the den needs to be described a little bit more.

June 18, 2009 7:28 am
SR on paragraph -1:

i think that the part about James saying Will should have to go get water is sort of…heartless or unrealistic because it says that Will’s hand is still pouring out blood so he obviously wouldn’t be able to get water.

June 18, 2009 7:29 am
tacos10 on paragraph -1:

I love this paragraph because it’s not only funny but also true!

June 18, 2009 7:29 am
lexis on paragraph -1:

How can she admire Will for being strong? She’s the one with the hurt leg who has to walk around. He orders people a lot.

June 18, 2009 7:32 am
lexis on paragraph -1:

I like how he is starting to consider James and Ketzal as family. They’ve been through a lot together but this really brings it together. It kind of makes it awkward for Ketzal if she’s really in love with him, though!

June 18, 2009 7:34 am
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